Thursday, September 27, 2012

rough draft


Chloe Brotherton

English 1510

September 22, 2012

 

Questioning a Construct: Semicolon

What is a semicolon?  What is it used for?  The semicolon is seen in articles and other pieces of writings but is not always understood.  According to Lynne Truss, British expert on grammar, many non-writers avoid the semicolon.  Not as simple as the comma (brief pause) or the period (complete stop), the semicolon (moderate pause) is definitely considered one of the more unpopular punctuation marks, possibly because not many people know how to use it.  Besides being a neat little symbol of a dot on top of a comma, it has several uses and can be practiced as an effective writing tool.  Perhaps if people knew how to properly use the semicolon, it would be used more in their writings.

Developed in 1494 by Aldus Manutius the Elder, an Italian printer, the semicolon was used to separate words of opposed meaning and to indicate interdependent statements.  The semicolon was first used systematically by an English writer, Ben Jonson, later on.  The semicolon is sometimes avoided because, according to Lynne Truss, "They are old-fashioned", "They are middle-class", "They are optional", "They are mysteriously connected to pausing" (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Semicolon) and many other reasons.  While some of those reasons may be understandable, the semicolon is still an important part of punctuation.  Its functions include listing items, linking related or independent clauses, connecting sentences that contain internal punctuation, a “super comma”, or as a moderate pause.  Do not use it with a conjunction, though; that’s a common misconception of the semicolon.  Typically a semicolon is used when forming a bond between two related, contrasting statements.

When using a semicolon it is essential that one use it correctly!  But the problem with that, though, is it’s “The most feared punctuation on earth” (http://theoatmeal.com/comics/semicolon).  The semicolon isn’t really taught in schools (or schools don’t really spend a great deal of time teaching it), because it’s not necessarily needed for writing.  It’s not like a period or a comma; a sentence can definitely survive without a semicolon.  A semicolon can make a sentence sound better, though, with its pausing effect.  For example, “Today was a great day.  I played with puppies for hours on end.”  Nothing is wrong with that phrase, but it would sound better with a semicolon for its pause: “Today was a great day; I played with puppies for hours on end.”  Since these are two statements, a semicolon can replace a period.

 Two statements or independent clauses can also be separated by a conjunction too, and this is where things can get tricky. A semicolon can be used with a conjunction adverb, but not a conjunction. Conjunctions consist of the words, “and, for, but, since, because, though, so, etc.,” and when a conjunction is present, there is no need for a semicolon. A conjunction adverb, on the other hand, is an indication of a connection between two independent clauses in one sentence. Conjunction adverbs include, “also, however, otherwise, consequently, indeed, similarly, finally, likewise, etc.”  People seem to have trouble grasping this concept, and common errors like these occur quite frequently: “I was so happy today; because I won twenty five million dollars.”  Either leave out the semicolon, or eliminate the word “because” (Example: “I was so happy today because I won twenty five million dollars,” or “I was so happy today; I won twenty five million dollars”).

 

            The most common way to use a semicolon is to connect two independent clauses.  For example, the phrase “I love my mom.  She bought me two dozen roses,” is acceptable, but a semicolon could also come into play here:  “I love my mom; she bought me two dozen roses.”  An independent clause is a sentence that can stand alone (subject, verb, direct object= independent clause).  “I love my mom” and “She bought me two dozen roses” are both independent clauses, and can both stand on their own.  They can also be separated by a semicolon, though.  Either way is acceptable.

            A semicolon can be used when forming a bond between two relating or contrasting statements.  For example: “I gnaw on old car tires; it strengthens my jaw so I’ll be better conditioned for bear combat,” (http://theoatmeal.com/comics/semicolon).  The semicolon used here strengthens the relationship between gnawing on tires and combatting bears.  A case where a semicolon is not needed, though, is when the statements have no sort of connection to each other.  For example, “I fought the bear and won.  Also, I never kiss plague rats on the mouth,” (http://theoatmeal.com/comics/semicolon).  A semicolon would be incorrect if used in this context; stick with a period.

            When a sentence contains internal punctuation (i.e., a comma) it is acceptable to use a semicolon to prevent a run on.  For example, “When bunnies hate each other, they’ll often square dance; bunnies are wonderful square dancers.”  Without a semicolon, this sentence would be long and awkward.  Instead of two commas and a conjunction here and there, it would make more sense to use a semicolon in this context.  Too many commas would resort to comma splices, and a period would lose the connection between the two clauses (http://theoatmeal.com/comics/semicolon).

            A semicolon can be used as a super comma (“what’s a super comma?”).  A super comma is a semicolon being used in listing items, like states or favorite foods, in sentences that already contain commas.  For example, “While looking for my pet hamster, I traveled to Cincinnati, Ohio; Columbus, Ohio; and Athens, Ohio.”  It can also be used to enable one to list and describe characters in a sentence.  For instance, “My favorite movies include Pineapple Express, a comedy; Titanic, a drama; and Paranormal Activity 2, a horror film.”

               

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Sources:

"Conjunction (grammar)." Wikipedia. Wikimedia Foundation, 25 Sept. 2012. Web. 27 Sept. 2012. <http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Conjunction_(grammar)>.

"Semicolons in Lists." Using Semicolons in Lists. N.p., n.d. Web. 27 Sept. 2012. <http://www.grammar-monster.com/lessons/semicolons_in_lists.htm>.

"Using Semicolons." Grammar and Punctuation:. University of Wisconsin, n.d. Web. 27 Sept. 2012. <http://writing.wisc.edu/Handbook/Semicolons.html>.

Inman, Mathew. "The Oatmeal." How to Use a Semicolon -. N.p., n.d. Web. 27 Sept. 2012. <http://theoatmeal.com/comics/semicolon>.

Wednesday, September 26, 2012


Chloe Brotherton

English 1510

September 26, 2012

Peer Review Practice

                The essay “Due Tomorrow, Do Tomorrow” wasn’t the best of essays.  It lacked many essay essentials, like an introduction, thesis statement, supporting paragraphs, etc.  It also broke some essay rules, like saying “I.”  “Due Tomorrow, Do Tomorrow” was constructed more as a novel rather than an essay and had a lot of unnecessary portions, like the Desperate Housewives part.  Some good things about this essay are it definitely kept me entertained and even giggling at some parts while reading.  It had paragraphs and looked like the person actually put some effort into writing this since it was seven pages.  Some bad things about this essay are that it was written really poorly, almost like a 7th grader wrote it.  It was full of many grammar and punctuation errors, some of which were unnecessary.  Example: “. . . I had— and it had benefitted me greatly.”  There was no need for a ‘—’ in that sentence.  It was a pathetic excuse for an essay and I would give it a C-; even though it didn’t really explain anything but I can see the person put a little bit of effort into writing this.

Saturday, September 22, 2012

Intro


Chloe Brotherton

English 1510

September 22, 2012

Questioning a Construct: Semicolon

                What is a semicolon?  What is it used for?  The semicolon is seen in articles and other pieces of writings but is not always understood.  According to Lynne Truss, British expert on grammar, many non-writers avoid the semicolon.  Not as simple as the comma or period, it’s definitely considered one of the more unpopular punctuation marks; possibly because not many people know how to use it.  Besides being a neat little symbol of a dot on top of a comma, it has several uses and can be practiced as an effective writing tool.  Perhaps if people knew how to properly use the semicolon, it would be used more in their writings.

                Developed in 1494 by Aldus Manutius the Elder, an Italian printer, the semicolon was used to separate words of opposed meaning and to indicate interdependent statements.  The semicolon was first used systematically by an English writer, Ben Jonson, later on.  The semicolon is sometimes avoided because, according to Lynne Truss, "They are old-fashioned", "They are middle-class", "They are optional", "They are mysteriously connected to pausing" and many other reasons.  While some of those reasons may be understandable, the semicolon is still an important part of punctuation.  Its functions include listing items, linking related or independent clauses, connecting sentences that contain internal punctuation, or as a moderate pause.  Do not use it with a conjunction, though; that’s a common misconception of the semicolon.  Typically a semicolon is used when forming a bond between two relating of contrasting statements.

Wednesday, September 19, 2012

Bernhardt


Chloe Brotherton

English 1510

September 19, 2012

“Seeing the Text” Stephen A. Bernhardt

 

Summary

Stephen A. Bernhardt’s “Seeing the Text” breaks down the process of looking at a text; according to Bernhardt, “a text can be seen, must be seen, in a process which is essentially different from the perception of speech.”  Bernhardt goes on to explain the different kinds of texts and what makes that style of writing unique.  He really goes in depth and analyzes the little things that a reader may not realize.

Synthesis

“Seeing the Text” is similar to other readings we have read this semester because it goes into detail about a function of writing, but it is also somewhat different.  It is different than other readings we have read because it shows an example of an article (Wetlands) and has a chart breaking down kinds of texts.  It was also relatively shorter.

QDJ

4.  I believe when writing an essay there is a specific format to follow because essays are very formal and if you do anything other than the expected criteria you are wrong.  You may not be “wrong”, but you won’t get full credit if your essay doesn’t have the following: introduction, thesis, three or more supporting paragraphs, and conclusion.  It has been like that ever since high school, and it’s drilled in our heads that a proper essay must be in that format. 

AEI

3.  The definition for “gestalt” is: a configuration, pattern, or organized field having specific properties that cannot be derived from the summation of its component parts; a unified whole.  Bernhardt, on the other hand, uses “gestalt” as a law or idea for the text.  Now that I have a better understanding of the word it does help with reading this article.

After thoughts

I found this article to be boring.  It was a boring topic and I really wasn’t interested in learning about texts.  He went into such depth about the anatomy of a text, too.  At least it was one of the shorter articles we’ve had.

Monday, September 17, 2012

Porter


Chloe Brotherton

English 1510

September 17, 2012

James E. Porter “Intertextuality and the Discourse Community”

 

Summary

James E. Porters “Intertextuality and the Discourse Community” article is about the absurdity of how our writings must always be original and any ideas borrowed are plagiarized.  Porter explains the principle of the phrase “intertextuality” meaning not all ideas are plagiarized, but contain traces of other texts. 

Synthesis

“Intertextuality and the Discourse Community” is somewhat like the other pieces we have read this semester in the sense of explaining a concept to the reader.  But it’s also kind of different because instead of telling us how to do something or fix it, he is just explaining his views on the concepts of our culture’s way of writing.

QDJ

4.  Porter’s concept of evaluating writing should be its “acceptability” within the reader’s community is different than I assumed before reading the article because I always had different techniques of writing, some from high school and some I learned this year in English 1510.  For a paper to be “acceptable” it must have expected social science sections, demonstrate contributing knowledge to the field, demonstrate familiarity, use a scientific method of analyzing results, etc.  I wouldn’t necessarily agree with all of this, but Porter does definitely have some good points.

5.  I believe Porter’s work reflects the principles he’s writing about.  He got his point across to me and even made me think about the concept in a different light because I have always kind of thought the same thing about plagiarism and intertextuality.  Even if his article wasn’t “original” he still explained had valid facts/opinions like a good article should. 

AEI

2.  The plagiarism policy for the course I’m in now is unless you copy and paste an article or parts of various articles then that is plagiarism.  But if you take the same idea for that article and put it in your own words than that is not plagiarism.  Also, if you quote the passage from the article you want to use and site the article and the author it is not plagiarism.

Meta Moment

Porter’s study hasn’t necessarily changed the way I imagined writers writing; I haven’t really put thought into writers writing though.  I just see a writer writing on a computer, nothing special.  Adopting his notions would change my ways but I doubt I’ll fully adopt his notions.

After thoughts

This wasn’t the most interesting article, but his concept of textuality was something worth reading about.  I always pondered on the idea of plagiarism; isn’t everything technically plagiarized?  Unless you are the one coming up with a new idea or such, is anything you say/write original?  Porter put this is a different perspective for me.
Chloe Brotherton

English 1510

September 14, 2012

Peter Elbow “The Voice in Writing Again: Embracing Contraries”


Getting Ready to Read

I construct my identity through my Facebook profile by my pictures, my ‘about me’, my statuses, and my information. My online identity is different than my at home identity because it’s really easy to be myself on the internet; people who are shy in real life use the internet all the time to express their true identities because typing what you think is a lot easier than saying it to people.

QDJ

1. I define voice as someone’s feelings and opinions. Voices range from aggressive to passive. Everyone has one, and sometimes you don’t even have to speak to have a ‘voice’. Voice is just a form of expression. Elbow’s definition of ‘voice’ is a technique to make something sound more appealing, and I think voice is more than that; it goes beyond someone’s tone of talking.

2. It depends; when reading boring, bland articles I do not hear a voice. But when texting someone I really know or reading an interesting book my imagination hears a voice which makes the piece more interesting. So in that sense Elbow is right. But honestly I don’t like Elbow for some reason I feel like he’s forcing this information down my throat I just find him annoying and a sophistic thinker. I don’t agree with Elbow on page 55, paragraph 67 because writing is supposed to be you being creative and he’s saying we should ignore voice.

AEI

1. Resonance is having an effect on the audience/ reader, and sincerity is being serious in your piece or being sincere. Use these in your writings for an effective writing, because they are both really good tools for writing.

Connecting to Other Readings

2. Voice is definitely something used to influence writing. It’s like listening to a song; a pretty and appealing voice is essential to a good song. People with bad voices aren’t singers, and the same could be said about writing

Wednesday, September 12, 2012

Informal Writing


Chloe Brotherton

English 1510

September 12, 2012

Informal Writing

                Nikki Sixx from Motely Crue has had a crazy life… Actually, crazy would be an understatement.  He has written many books about his experiences, and one I have read and become quite fond of is “The Heroin Diaries.”  It’s basically his diary from when he was a heroin addict, with his own input after each entry.  It’s extremely fascinating; one entry was about how he saw evil midgets in his house, so he ran and hid in his closet and actually stayed there for a couple of days.  Nikki was a very tortured person, but he was also very creative and a good writer; all of the ingredients needed to make an interesting book.  One time he overdosed and his friends left him in a dumpster.  He was eventually found and taken to a hospital, where his life was saved.  After overdosing, he decided to turn his life around by quitting heroin and breaking away from his friends and girlfriend who were contributing to his addiction (even though he relapsed later on through the years, but that’s beside the point).

                Published in 2007, “The Heroin Diaries” was written once Nikki had calmed down and grown up a bit.  Nikki had always enjoyed writing, and this was definitely a story worth sharing.  He was very inspired writing this piece because the heroin had completely taken over his life for many years; he even described the heroin as “Hell”.  Once he overcame this awful drug, he felt he needed to share his experience to the world.  The life of a Rock ‘n’ Roll star isn’t always rainbows and butterflies; we as readers saw a very vulnerable, tortured, and dark side of Nikki Sixx. 

Chloe Brotherton

English 1510

September 12, 2012

Berkenkotter and Murray

 

Summary

Berkenkotter’s “Decisions and Revisions” and Murray’s “Response of a Laboratory Rat—or Being Protocoled” is about the proper steps a writer must take in order to compose a successful paper; it takes planning, evaluating, revising, and editing.  Berkenkotter and Murray work together practicing these tools and learning each other’s techniques in this article.

Synthesis

This article was somewhat different than the other ones assigned.  There were two writers instead of one, and these writers were evaluating one another opposed to one writer explaining to the reader what to do.

QDJ

1.        My impression of Murray’s writings is that they are extremely organized, well thought-out, and very in depth.  He took many steps before writing his final piece, which I admire him for.  When I write I do not take any caution and revise as I go, which may not be the best method, but it works for me most of the time.

2.       This study changed Berkenkotter’s understanding of writing processes, particularly planning and revision, by observing Murray and how much time and effort he spent in the just the process of planning whatever he was going to write.  Berkenkotter, a writer herself,  was shocked at the amount of planning Murray did, which is saying something.

AEI

1.        When I write, I need to be in a relaxed environment and state of mind; my writing is altered depending on my mood and setting.  I would characterize my level of writing as average because I’m good at writing stories and poems, but essays… not so much.  I’m not the well-rounded writer that I wished I was.  I tend to just write as I go which great writers like Murray do not do.

Meta Moment

One thing I learned from the Berkenkotter and Murray article is how essential planning can be to a writing piece.  It can really make a good piece an even better piece.  Maybe I will try planning before writing in the future.

Monday, September 10, 2012

Berger


Chloe Brotherton

English 1510

September 10, 2012

“Ways of Seeing”

Before you Read

When thinking of a man and a woman together, we picture them appealing, the man strong and attractive, and the woman thin and pretty.  After looking up pictures of men and women, I saw exactly what I expected; a tall, muscular, tan man with a shorter but not too short woman by his side with a nice body and long hair.  Society has made us believe that looks are so important, and if you don’t look like the girl or the boy in the magazine, you aren’t attractive.

QDJ

2.  Advertisements use attractive people, mainly women, as objects to get their point across.  It could be an advertisement for anything, baby products, cars, milk, etc., and you can almost guarantee the person(s) used in the advertisement are attractive.  Being unattractive is extremely looked down upon and it’s sad.

4.  The audience is anyone who may be opposed to Berger’s article, especially women.  It seems he is trying to persuade the reader.

5.  The “other” is the thing that attracts us, whether it be a nude person or even an object such as food.  If it were a beer advertisement, it could be a woman in a bikini holding whatever beer is being advertised.

McCloud


Chloe Brotherton

English 1510

September 10, 2012

“The Vocabulary of Comics”

Summary

“The Vocabulary of Comics” by Scott McCloud is a comic strip about how our brain is programmed to view an icon as the actual object.  For example, seeing a picture of yourself and thinking “that’s me!” when in actuality it’s not you, it’s a picture of you; except it’s not a picture of you, it’s a pixilated figure on a paper like item.  That’s how the whole comic is written, a breaking down of everyday icons. 

Synthesis

“The Vocabulary of Comics” is hard to compare to other pieces we have read this year, because it was a completely different style of writing.  Instead of the usual bland article written about how to properly research a paper or construct an argument, McCloud’s comic pokes fun at how the brain works and technically unless it’s the actual object, everything is an icon.  I found this reading particularly interesting.

QDJ

2.  Cartoons tend to draw more attention and focus opposed to the average article, and McCloud is aware of this.  Getting your point across through a comic is effective because people like the simplicity of pictures and words; it makes one feel at ease opposed to reading a 10 page article.  I would take a comic strip over a reading article any day.

3.  McCloud is right in ways of the reader becoming more distracted by focusing on the details of the pictures instead of the actual point being made.  He made a good choice by keeping the comic plain with little detail.  Pretty pictures can easily consume one’s mind; notice how cartoons on t.v. are more successful and watched if the cartoon characters are appealing.

AEI

4.  The concept of one having a mask is interestingly true.  Without a mask, one’s emotions would be available for all to see which isn’t okay in society.  Maybe it’s better off if everyone had masks.

After Reading Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this piece because it wasn’t your typical boring article.  I liked the pictures and word bubbles because they kept my attention and made the reading interesting.  I definitely wouldn’t mind if more of our class readings were like this.

Friday, September 7, 2012


Chloe Brotherton

English 1510

9/7/12

 

Summary

      The Alden Library videos weren’t as bad as I thought they’d be; they were actually somewhat entertaining, as well as very informing.  I learned about what purpose each floor held and the different opportunities there.  For example, the second floor is where the library service is, and each student can rent a laptop for no more than three hours (with the exception of the laptop must never leave the library).  I also learned that the library is open till midnight, and one floor is open 24 hours!  This is not your ordinary library, and I will definitely find myself spending more time at this facility.

Wednesday, September 5, 2012


Chloe Brotherton

English 1510

9/5/2012

Summary

In Kantz’s article ‘Helping students use textual sources persuasively’, Kantz takes two students and compares their work, giving her input and advice throughout the process.  She teaches them how to properly use research and how important research is for a good paper.

Synthesis

Kantz’s article is similar to Kleine’s, in the sense of good research and information is key to a good paper.  But Kantz and Kleine have different methods of using their research.

QDJ

1.       Kantz contends that facts and opinions are essentially the same and that they are a claim. The difference between a fact and an opinion is how they are received by an audience. An argument, on the other hand, consists of claims proved with data and backed by warrants (ethical claims). An argument can be supported through another or multiple arguments.

2.       According to Kantz, students don’t understand/have difficulty with how to properly write a synthesis or cite sources, creating an original argument, rhetorical contexts or situations, and writing rough drafts.  Kantz is correct because I know myself and others struggled with this in high school. 

AEI

1.        I haven’t really had any college assignments yet, except for these reading responses.  The reading responses, though, give sufficient explanation of what the professor is looking for, for example, they are very blunt and give pretty good direction on what to do.   We were given a paper on what to do and how to do it, with the summary, synthesis, and after thoughts. 

Meta Moment

The concepts of construction Kantz is trying to analyze is good techniques for writing successful papers, using two different students point of views. 

After Thoughts

Kantz’s article was helpful and gave me a new perspective on writing papers.  I now have a better grasp on how to properly research a paper and write a rough draft.  I liked how she used to fictitious students to make the paper more interesting and easier to relate to. 

PS- I can't find your email, and my home work from last week posted as blank on my blog, why did it do that and what do I do?? Thanks, Chloe